November 11

In this class, Mr Paterson talked about the things we can't have in our essays. For example, personal pronouns. In personal pronouns, there are I, my, me, you, you're, we, us, our and so on. I haven't really thought of these things when I write essays so I didn't know how much I am using it. So I went to my essay and see if I have used any of the personal pronouns. There were lots of time when I was using it so I was a bit surprised. I thought I need to fix it, so I used other words to connect to the next word.

Mr Paterson also talked about contractions&Run on. In this section, there are things we are not allowed to use like writing "don't" as do not, and writing "can't" as cannot, etc, "and so on". I am kind of used to using these words so I believed there are lots of these words. However, when I try to find these words, there weren't any of them. This means I was writing in the right format and just for incase, I tried to find another group member's one, but my other group members also didn't use any of the contractions&Run on, so I was really surprised.

We are almost finished with improving our body paragraph and improving our introduction paragraph and the only left is the conclusion. I think we are not doing the conclusion this week because there should be more part to improve in other parts so I want to make my group's introduction and the body paragraph a really good paragraph before we move on to the conclusion.